Feature Article Peer Reviews

Peer Review #1: Jessica Karam
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
Over all there was a lot of detail about her stories subject, new years resolutions. There could possibly be additional detail added regarding other new years resolutions.

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
The author could have interviewed other people who have attempted or succeeded with New Year's resolutions. There are many people who have information on this subject.

3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes, there was a very good story line. It was easy to follow and very interesting. I wanted to keep reading to hear more about the womans success with her resolution.

4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
Over all I really enjoyed reading this article. It was a good story and it kept me interested. It was motivational and I really enjoyed reading about Nada and her successful New Year's resolution.

Peer Review #2: Stephanie Kent
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
The author could have added more detasil about Darren's current situationa nd his future plans. Ultimately that seems to be what the story is building up to and once she got that point she just summerized it.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
I was very interested in the sotry. She could have possibly interviewd other players on Darrens team.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
The scene was excellent I felt like i got to know exactly what Darren was going through as he gre3w up playing basketball. With this story line it may have been necessary to go into a lenthier story so the reader can know more about what it is goin on.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
I would have likes to read more about what Darren is currently doing and also more about his future plans playing in Europe.