Peer Edit on Articles

Peer Review #1:
Graduation Ceremony will be Changed in 2010 at Eastview High School
Written by Jessica Karam
After reading her lead and backup I found a few areas that could use improvement. One being her first sentence. The last sentence of her first paragraph should be part of her first sentence. It states what the article is all about and should be made clear at the beginning of the story. Also there needs to be more information about what is going to be happening during next years graduation in the second paragraph. That being said, I am aware that she was unable to interview people prior to this writing and the majority of her useful information will be coming from these interviews. I think it is a solid topic and an interesting story. Once the lead is rearranged and more information is gethered it should turn out to be a great article.


Peer Review #2:
Senior Privileges
Writen by Stephanie Kent
The first sentence is not a long sentence explaining exactly what the 5 Ws and H are. It does introduce the topic but it doesnt state any of the crucial information. A few questions left unanswered were: What privilieges are the student council pushing for?, why is the administration getting in the way of these privileges?, and what were the privileges for past years?. Not all of these questions were answered in the second paragraph either. After interviews she should have more background information and the article will be improved with more information.